#8sunday July 19 , 2015 Scott’s Story 13

It’s Weekend Writing Warriors time again. This is my submission, I offer another piece from my as-yet-untitled WIP. Orida is hurried to her departure shuttle, and embarks. This is what happens next.

#8sunday July 19 , 2015 Scott’s Story 13

Unlike her entry pilot, this young man was taciturn in the extreme. She could feel the tension rolling off his body as he spoke in monosyllables over his com-unit  to ground control. His hands were white and tight on the steering piece.

It had been a tense, long five minutes since lift off. Tohn had not addressed a single word to her since his brief introduction. Orida had lost all sense of height or depth in the dark, there was no visual reference to measure speed or altitude. Suddenly, the craft began to rattle and shake. Tohn wrestled desperately with the shuddering controls. His upper lip was beaded with sweat and his face was white. “Losing altitude, brace for impact.”

© Kim Magennis 2015

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22 thoughts on “#8sunday July 19 , 2015 Scott’s Story 13

  1. You had me uneasy at the mere description of how little feedback she was getting from her pilot or the shuttle itself. Tense…. and wonderfully described.

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  2. Well, who didn’t see THAT coming after last week, which is a compliment because you’ve been expertly building the tension and making us worry…can’t wait for whatever’s next! Terrific snippet.

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  3. uh oh. Love the way she loses all sense of up or down, the pilot’s grim attitude, all of it. Makes me wonder why they risked going up in the storm which adds to the overall mystery. Nicely done!

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    1. Thanks Teresa. Our poor characters, disaster is always a keystroke away!
      I am afraid that puns can be irresistible. But in my defense, Ed started it … ;-}


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