#8sunday August 30 , 2015 Birdie 05

Hello Weekend Writing Warriors ! Time to sharpen those pencils… (or any technological equivalent thereof.) This is my next 8-sentence-snippet in my latest short story.

#8sunday August 30 , 2015 Birdie 05

After the introduction of our main character, we discover that she is a haunt, who survives by consuming fragments of her broken, discarded dreams. Made homeless by the demolishing of her childhood home, she takes to wandering the streets. She is unexpectedly gifted with the attention of a stray ginger cat. Every day the cat goes on a mission. One day, our haunt decides to follow it.

The read the preceding text click here. The story continues with the following 8 sentences:

The door banged shut, and the figure stirred.

Her face was swollen, with dirty tear tracks down hollowed, hungry cheeks. Her hair hung in mousy strands down her shoulders and neck. There was a small trickle of blood from her split lip.

“Oh Kitty,” she murmured as the orange cat trotted up to her, completely undisturbed by the scene. The cat smeared itself against the girl and climbed on her lap, kneading and head butting in an ecstasy of reunion. The child rummaged in her pocket and brought out the smallest crumb of food. The cat accepted the offering with dignified delicacy, and promptly sat, still on her lap, to clean its face.

© Kim Magennis 2015

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30 thoughts on “#8sunday August 30 , 2015 Birdie 05

  1. Cats have a way of comforting their people with just their presence. I love the quiet acceptance between the two. Beautiful tory that just tugs at the heartstrings.
    I only worry that whoever is hurting the girl will not “punish her” by hurting the cat.

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  2. Great snippet! I loved the description of the girl, very well placed bits that very effectively paint a picture of her, as well as her situation. Immediately I felt empathy for her – who is this girl, why is she in such rough shape, and who has hurt her? And I’m drooling to know what’s up with that cat!

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  3. “Smeared:”

    That one word is absolute perfection. I was smeared by the tortie who owns me when I got home tonight. =)

    I want to hug this girl, wipe her lip, stroke her hair, feed her, and take her and her feline friend somewhere safe and clean….

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