#8sunday October 18 , 2015 Birdie 11

Hello again, Weekend Writing Warriors! This is my next 9-sentence-snippet in my latest short story. 

#8sunday October 18 , 2015 Birdie 11

This story is told from the point of view of a ‘haunt’. She is trapped in a limbo of homeless wandering, when she meets an orange cat and its human child. After an encounter with the child’s abusive father the trio escape into the nearby wilds.

To read the preceding text click here. The story continues with the following 9 sentences:

The child’s eyes fluttered open, and the cat stirred between us. She smiled.

“Hello, Miss! I told you, Kitty, that she would be just fine!” The last was said in a mock stern tone. The cat stretched and yawned, nestled happily between our bodies.

As she examined my face, she took on a sweetly solemn expression.

“You are that Lady, aren’t you Miss?”

She smiled at my incomprehension, “Never mind Miss, we will show you!”

© Kim Magennis 2015

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32 thoughts on “#8sunday October 18 , 2015 Birdie 11

  1. This is really an interesting story. I wonder if the child knows something about the way the girl died and if that will have a strong bearing on why she and the cat can interact with her? Really great dialogue, very natural and engrossing.

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  2. “That lady?” You’ve got me wondering which lady she means. I also wonder what, exactly the cat’s up to. Is she between them to protect one of them from the other, or is it just trying to stay warm? With a cat like this, one searches for deeper motives.

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  3. I love that she seems to have named the cat “Kitty” that’s a very childish thing to do. The cat is, as others have said, a great character as well!

    Since she’s using Miss as a title–like a name–it should be set off with commas, though. Like “Hello, John.” “Hello, Miss.”

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  4. I like the cat too, adds a lovely touch of humanization as we see how both characters interact with the cat. I always want to bring animals into my writing and somehow it never seems to fit, so I enjoy it when I see them elsewhere. Your cat seems to fit here naturally, not stuck in awkwardly. 🙂

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