#8sunday November 08, 2015 Birdie 14

Greetings fellow Weekend Writing Warriors! This is my next snippet in my short story entitled “Birdie”. 

#8sunday November 08, 2015 Birdie 14

This story is told from the point of view of a ‘haunt’. She is trapped in a limbo of homeless wandering, when she meets an orange cat and its human child. After an encounter with the child’s abusive father the trio escape into the nearby wilds.The next morning the child takes them on a mission to the local hospital…

To read the preceding text click here. The story continues with the following 10 sentences:

The child left me in the shadow of a potted palm, as she went ahead to peep into each of the open doors. At the third door, she stopped and beckoned. I whispered to the cat, and together we made our way cautiously to her small crouched form. I hunkered down next to her, and she murmured “Here! We need to go in here!”

I peered into the room, with its single white-draped occupant. Machines beeped and wheezed, in splendid isolation. Finally sure that it was otherwise empty, we slid in the doorway. I quietly shut the door behind us to keep us from officious eyes.

We approached the bed.

© Kim Magennis 2015

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19 thoughts on “#8sunday November 08, 2015 Birdie 14

  1. Wondering if the “haunt” is going to see herself lying in the bed? Maybe this is why she seems trapped here. Even so, how do the child and cat see her so clearly? Very tense as we wait to find out. Great snippet.


  2. Okay – so if the machines are beeping in the room, does that mean she’s not really dead? Just having an out-of-body experience? Single white-draped occupant seems to foretell death, but dead people don’t need machines.

    This is a great scene, KIm. Full of tension.

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