#8sunday November 15 , 2015 Birdie 15

Greetings fellow Weekend Writing Warriors! This is my last snippet in my short story entitled “Birdie”. 

#8sunday November 15 , 2015 Birdie 15

This story is told from the point of view of a ‘haunt’. She is trapped in a limbo of homeless wandering, when she meets an orange cat and its human child. After an encounter with the child’s abusive father the trio escape into the nearby wilds.The next morning the child takes them on a mission to the local hospital…

To read the preceding text click here. This time the sentence count was not in my favour, (creative punctuation alert) the final six sentences have been included in the text on the page detailing preceding text (for those who want to go there). The story reaches its climax with the following sentences:

Even though it was unnaturally pale and altered by the pipes and bandages, the face was clearly recognisable. I felt the entire universe dislocate in a dizzying shift.

I lay, unnaturally still, barely breathing on the white bed, and I stood, hovering next to the bed in the company of a dubious cat and a grubby urchin, as a confusing mix of observer and observed washed over me.

“The nurses said you couldn’t decide if you wanted to live or die,” her voice was barely above a whisper. “They said that you had nearly been beaten to death by your husband, and that you were badly broken.”

At her words, the flood of memory poured down my cheeks in hot tears. The wave of shame and fear rose up and crashed against my heart and mind. I found myself kneeling on the cold tiled floor, weeping heartbroken for my poor lost self. The child wrapped her arms around me until the sobs subsided.

“But Miss, you aren’t broken, you are here with Kitty and me.”

© Kim Magennis 2015

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39 thoughts on “#8sunday November 15 , 2015 Birdie 15

  1. Wow–double-take! ““They said that you had nearly been beaten to death by your husband, and that you were badly broken.”

    Beautiful snippet, Kim. I choked up. Simply and beautifully honest, innocent, candid. The characters have such vulnerability …

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  2. Great excerpt! Definitely moving, not at all cheesy, very easy to sympathize with the poor woman. The little girl is so well done, too. If your next story is anything like this, you’ll have a lot of followers. 🙂

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  3. I’ve missed a couple, and don’t have the mental acuity to go back just now. But this – I love this. Even with some pieces missing from my personal puzzle , it feels like a perfect ending.

    Brava! You gave me chills!

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