Greetings Weekend Writing Warriors! These are the next 10 sentences in a sci-fi short story about Daniel, whose carefully planned and executed suicide turns out to be an inexplicable failure. Waking up, locked in a tiny cage, he discovers that his presence is a significant problem, to at least two others, too.
#8sunday December 06 , 2015 The Unwanted Package 3
“Please don’t move.” The voice was apologetic. “Sorry, it’s a bit tight. It was the best we could find under such short notice.”
“For goodness sake!” The owner of the second voice was not in the least bit sorry, “Don’t talk to it! How many Regulations are you going to break today?”
The cage was a tight fit. He had been rolled into a fetal position and squeezed into it so that he was lying on his right side. The voices continued their argument behind him.
© Kim Magennis 2015
You can find the preceding sentences here, for continuity.
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Ha, definitely a conversation that gives anyone walking or listening in a double take. Especially when said onlooker finds that the cage has a he and not an it inside. Lovely snippet!
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Strange conversation – wondering what’s about to happen.
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Doesn’t sound like he is in the best of places. Hoping things improve fast.
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Don’t talk to IT? What the heck, or who, is holding him captive. It’s got to be completely unnerving. He survived the suicide, happy or angry about it, he seems to have woud up in an even worse situation. Yikes.
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I’d almost suggest that his suicide attempt succeeded and he’s gone to Hell…
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This reminds me of someone who’s trapped a nuisance skunk or something. The lack of concern for his comfort is not a good sign!
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Your imagination boggles this readers mind. Fascinating what comes from your mind and works itself into a story.
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That is very kind Charmaine. Thank you!
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Quite the unpleasant situation! But very attention-grabbing. Can’t wait to read more!!!
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What a funny conversation to hear when you are crammed in a tight spot.
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It gets stranger, Aurora. 😉
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Very, very interesting. I enjoyed this.
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Thank you Cara
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I like your choice of image. It fits the narrative.
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Thank you!
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This sounds like . . . a not so good situation. Now I’m really wondering what this place is and what’s going on!
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That doesn’t sound comfortable. Makes me wonder what he did to deserve it. Great snippet.
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Yikes, what the heck is going on here. He is in a very dangerous situation. Great scene!
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