#8sunday December 20 , 2015 The Unwanted Package 5

Welcome Weekend Writing Warriors!  These are the next 9 sentences in my short story about Daniel, whose Day did not turn out as expected. Waking up, locked in a tiny cage, he discovers that his presence a problem to more than himself. (Creative punctuation alert: I had to edit the text and fudge the punctuation to get this batch through-all these short sentences!)

#8sunday December 20 , 2015 The Unwanted Package 5

“We have another collection scheduled in twenty minutes.” More rustles of pages being flipped through. “Our only choice is to insert this one as we extract the next one. We can make up the missing specimen at the following extraction, see? It’s a multiple, so who is to notice if we take five and not four? And that gets rid of this one.”

Daniel could only admire the neatness of the plan-from their perspective of course. From his, it just plain sucked. Back to square one: the same joyless, pointless existence.

© Kim Magennis 2015

You can find the preceding sentences here, for continuity.

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25 thoughts on “#8sunday December 20 , 2015 The Unwanted Package 5

  1. Not exactly the way anyone expects a suicide to end up, I’m guessing. I backtracked, and I’m fascinated. I’m hoping Daniel finds his inner strength, away from his mother, who seems to be at least partly a factor in his choice to end his life…

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  2. This series is so intriguing because of how much we don’t know as much as what we do. I agree Daniel’s day is sounding very sucky and likely not to get any better in the short run. Can’t wait to see the description of the “extraction.”

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  3. I just backtracked and read this series of posts from the beginning. Is this published??? Holy cow, what a neat little story you have going, Kim! I’m full of all kinds of questions, and I’m worried for him. You did a great job of establishing his character early on, and we can see that he has at least one sympathetic “galactic paper-shuffler”, the one who talked to him (aka “it”). Great post! I need to know more. 🙂

    No snippet for me this week.

    I hope you have a good Christmas!

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  4. It’s chilling how unattached they sound about a living being.
    Well, what is going through Daniel’s mind, it sounds like he is ready to give up on himself… again. I can’t imagine he is going to feel very comfortable about about the insertion/extraction.

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