Greetings Weekend Writing Warriors! These are the next 10 sentences in my short story about Daniel, whose Last Day did not turn out as expected. Rescued from an attempted suicide, locked in a tiny cage, he awaits his fate.
#8sunday January 10, 2016 The Unwanted Package 8
“Look, I am really sorry about the …”
“You never learn, do you?” It was Irate. “Stop talking to it!”
The tarpaulin was pulled off the cage, leaving a slight haze of dust. Daniel was facing an unprepossessing steel tray, wedged against the intersection of two equally dismal walls.
“Un-latch the cage.” There was a fumble of keys and chains, which rattled through the cage bars. “Three, two, one… push.”
© Kim Magennis 2015
You can find the preceding sentences here for continuity.
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Whimsy 
This is an never ending day for poor Daniel and to keep being called “it”. Wonder what’s about to happen to him next. Intriguing as ever.
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Thank you, Victoria. It ends up being a very long day.
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Oh MY, this just keeps getting more and more intriguing. And ominous! Loved the snippet, can’t wait for more.
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Thank you,Veronica
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I never know where you are taking this story! Good work!
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Thank you, Aurora. That is high praise and much appreciated.
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Bad boy and now he must suffer. Titled punishment.
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That is how Daniel has felt his whole life, Charmaine. Like he did something wrong to deserve a miserable life.
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Very very interesting here. I’m still intrigued as to where he is and what has happened, and just how badly the unknown captors have messed up. Thanks so much for sharing!
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Thanks Amalie. We find out a smidgen more next week.
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Push? Push where? Onto a metal tray? That doesn’t sound good!
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It does seem fairly haphazard, indeed, Caitlin. But in their defence, they usually deal with the dead.
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And that is what’s really disturbing me. o.O
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Great snippet. I wonder what will happen when the cage is un latched? Looking forward to finding out!
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Thank you, Stephanie. One thing is certain, it isn’t what Daniel expects to happen!
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Fantastic buildup and tension, Kim, nicely done!
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Thanks Steve, you are very kind.
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Yikes! This just gets creepier and creepier. I’d say he’s already in Hell. Hope he gets a pardon!
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He does get a change of scenery, Alexis. Thank you for stopping by!
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If he’s about to be let out of his cage, that’s good. I guess? I have a feeling it might not be!
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You can be forgiven for thinking that Christina. He will, I am sure, wonder the same, often.
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This is very intriguing
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Thank you, Fallon
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I reread the snippet after reading Ed’s comment and it did change my perspective – now I wonder if this isn’t purgatory or some place where he will have to prove himself if he wants a second chance at life?
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After a fashion, Chelle, I think you could be right.
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Oh my God, Kim, don’t leave us hanging here! Wow–lol, this story is good! I am so afraid for him right now. I’m thinking–a specimen about to be dissected. Or worse. Yikes!
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Thank you, Teresa. Fortunately, Irate and Apologetic are a tad squeamish. But I do think, later Daniel will wish fondly that disection is all he had to endure.
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I’m getting a Biblical vibe, like this is payment for his sin of suicide. You know, he’s gone to hell and is about to be punished.
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That is an interesting slant that I didn’t think of, Ed! He does end up feeling very hard done by.
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