#8sunday, 16/03/13 The Runaway

Greetings, Weekend Writing Warriors!  These are the first sentences in  my WIP about a boy who escapes from a medical facility in a time and place far from here. I have not finished this story, and have no idea where it is taking me. The title: Runaway is not final, neither is the name of my main character. So, for the next few weeks let’s see where he takes us.

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For once, Blagdan was grateful it was winter. The grey sleet bombarded  the rail pod’s plexiglass window. The passing metroscape blurred into a glittering smear of light and dark as the sun fled the sky.

He was glad for the thick cap which he pulled further down over his ears. The scarf was wrapped double round his neck covering his chin and mouth, and his hands were buried in over-sized gloves. His feet rattled, naked in the large boots that he had tightly laced not twenty minutes ago. The huge thick jacket nearly compensated for the thin medical gown he still wore under the hurriedly donned medtech uniform.

He wondered who Smith would have been going home to, and what kind of welcome he would have received. The portly grey-haired medtech had been kind, after a fashion. He had always spoken softly to the boy, and took less pleasure in the painful procedures that had become Blagdan’s daily ration.

© Kim Magennis 2016

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49 thoughts on “#8sunday, 16/03/13 The Runaway

  1. I don’t usually like a lot of description about scenery and clothes, but this was so well done and such a part of the scene that I was engrossed. Great snippet, and I’m really looking forward to more!

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  2. So intriguing! The premise hooked me right off. I wonder why he was grateful for winter during his escape? What kind of facility? Why and how did he escape? Where will he go? Full of questions here…great job!

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  3. You paint a good picture of a cold, bleak landscape. I feel sorry for the boy (I am assuming he was young) having to wear oversized clothes and no socks in his boots. Look forward to reading more.

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  4. Wonderfully descriptive passage. I get a very bad feeling about Blagdon’s past medical procedures and about the medtech whose clothes he’s now wearing. Can’t wait to see where this is going!

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  5. I got the chills with your description, but at the end, I’m so curious about Blagdon and his daily painful procedures. Why? I look forward to reading more! 🙂

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