#8sunday 16/04/10 The Runaway 5

Greetings, Weekend Writing Warriors!  These are the next 10 sentences in  my WIP about a boy who escapes from a medical facility in a time and place far from here. Blagdan falls asleep, and dreams. (I have included the last two sentences of last week’s post for continuity.)

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The Actor wore the dream like a cloak. Wrapped in its dark folds it was enthralled and appalled by the events playing out.

A small, dirty boy was crouched in the shell-battered remains of a large communal dwelling. The boy was afraid. He was hiding. Trying to be small like the ever-present scampering rodents, he breathed shallowly through parted lips.

His frail, hungry body stretched taught at the unmistakeable sound of a mechanical maneuvering the rubble strewn street. His body ran blistering hot, then freezing cold while he hovered there, ready for pointless flight.

You never got away from a mechanical.

Once you moved, you were as good as dead.

© Kim Magennis 2016

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© Kim Magennis 2016

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46 thoughts on “#8sunday 16/04/10 The Runaway 5

  1. I love the build up of tension here. Feels like something big is about to happen. You’ve definitely hooked me with these snippets. 🙂

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  2. Blistering hot and freezing cold. You really packed a punch with the descriptors on an emotional level Kim. Left me wondering — is he sick? Will he run anyway? Plus, my heart totally broke for him.

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  3. I imagine this is the dream Blagdan is having, picturing himself as the small boy and the mechanical as perhaps orderlies at the place he just left behind?
    “Trying to be small like the ever-present scampering rodents” Terrific visual.

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