Greetings, Weekend Writing Warriors! For the next few weeks I will be sharing one of the first short stories I wrote. Its title was inspired by a collection of short stories by a South African writer: Harvey Tyson. His book is a sparkling collection of birdwatching adventures and misadventures, and anyone who has been bitten by the birding bug (or who even knows and ardent birder) will find them hysterically true to life. Below is a link to get your own copy.
The Itch of the Twitch , by Harvey Tyson
My story takes ‘twitching’ into the future, and the Multiverse of Homo Galacticus.
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The two of us were elbow deep in mud. Water was dripping down my neck, and rolling, in icy driblets, between my shoulders. We were lying on our stomachs peering out from our hastily contrived hide. Our binoculars were glued to our faces.
The steady torrent of rain caused the scene to constantly quiver and shift. All colour was bleached into a drab grey-green. Something flickered in my peripheral vision.
I nudged my partner in the ribs, using the angle of my head to indicate the direction of my sighting. Both of us zoned into the spot: a dark, leafy cave at ground level, some one thousand five hundred meters away to our left.
© Kim Magennis
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I have been away for a while. What a wonderful snippet to read upon my return. Well done Kim.
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Thank you, my friend.
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What fantastic imagery! You put me right there in the scene.
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Thank you, Karen
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Very well described and I certainly feel like I’m in a different place (meters, hides, and caves!). I would like to know how cold it is there or if they’re stiff from lying in the mud propped on elbows.
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Thank you, Rachel. That is what I feel sci-fi is about. Making the commonplace strange and show it in a different light.
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Sigh…what a gorgeous piece of description! Love this snippet.
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Thank you Rose, that is very kind of you. Much appreciated
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very descriptive scene. Great snippet!
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Thank you, Fallon!
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That sounds just so… pleasant. I need a blanket, a cozy chair, and a purring cat after just reading that!
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Lol. Me too! Not my idea of fun 🙂
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I like your concept.
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Thank you, Elaine. I am hoping to write more short stories in this set.
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LOL. From this snippet I kind of get the impression birders are crazy!
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OCD and not quite normal! In the nicest way 😉
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Ah, I understand now. The way I am about carving my oboe reeds.
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Great scene! Tweeted.
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Thank you Elizabeth, much appreciated
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But, is it a bird?
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Excellent question, Aurora!
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You have left us with a mystery and I love it. Waiting ’til next week for the leafy cave to reveal what’s in it.
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Thank you, Charmaine!
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Absolutely love the description (and I don’t generally like to either read or write description!) in this snippet. I can see them perfectly–now what the heck do they see? LOL Great tease for next week!
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Thank you, Jenna! I am very glad you did
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Such a vivid setting! For some reason it feels a little more dangerous than your typical bird watching expedition.
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Very perceptive, Alexis! Yep, a tad more extreme…
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Cool concept for a story! My mother was an avid ‘birder’ so I can relate. Great snippet!
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I hope you enjoy the rest, Veronica!
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I’m always amazed at how intrepid birders can be. Great scene!
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Totally, Christina! Thank you!
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Great scene setting. I have a friend who is an avid, lifelong birdwatcher, and I am sure he would agree with the privations they go through to see the birds. Would like to know what he has seen at the cave.
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Birders are fascinating people. And such tales!
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Wow, I could sense everything they’re experiencing. It makes for a very dramatic scene. Awesome work!
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Thanks, Amy!
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Good scene setting! Am sure intrigued by that leafy cave, hope you pick up right from here next week.
Marcia
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Your wish, Marcia, is my command!
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Your writing always puts me right in the scene. I am there with them! Great job — again.
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Thank you, Cara. Much appreciated.
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Oh I just got the shivers! Terrific use of imagery and engaging our senses. Great tension.
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Thank you, Chelle
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Oh, what did they see? What is in that cave? Great tease! 🙂
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Thank you, Jessica. That is the question!
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