Greetings, Weekend Writing Warriors! For the next few weeks I will be sharing one of the first short stories I wrote. Its was inspired by a collection of short stories The Itch of the Twitch , by Harvey Tyson, a South African writer. This week we are exposed to more of the unique dialect that Twitchers (birdwatchers) use amongst themselves. As before, I have included a short glossary of Twitching terms at the end of this post.
This story takes ‘twitching’ into the future, and the Multiverse of Homo Galacticus.
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Due to a rather unfortunate flaw in my personality, I had also claimed, out loud, in front of the rest of the local twitching community, that I was going to list the Xenica. So, now I was committed, and would not be able to face down a failure. To dip out afforded one the worst forms of ridicule imaginable to a dedicated lister.
I lay, rigidly still, breathing shallowly through my mouth, to filter out the intensifying smell of the lair. Slowly the rain thinned to a dismal drizzle. The heat of my body and the coolness of the rain had caused a slight mist to film the eye piece of my binoculars. A malevolently red and black millipede-like bug trundled centimeters past my left elbow. The larger, more dangerous fauna knew better than to dawdle in or around a Xenica’s range, so we were safe in that regard.
© Kim Magennis
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Glossary of Twitching Terms
Twitching – birdwatching; LBJ – little brown job, a common, often unidentifiable brown bird; Mega– a very rare bird; Chook – already seen or common bird; Jizzer – someone able to jizz, or identify a bird with an overall impression given by the general shape, movement, behaviour, etc; to dip out – to fail to see a bird the twitcher is looking for; Lister – a birdwatcher who keeps an extensive list of all the species they have seen.
I hope the twitcher will be able to back up that boast and count the xenica, although it sounds pretty fearsome. Enjoying this story, another excellent snippet.
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It’s never a good sign when the larger animals avoid a certain place. Great visualisation.
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Great visuals and the tension is really rmping up about this Xenica bird.
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Now that’s dedication! Loved the descriptions, even though they gave me the heebie-jeebies. 🙂
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Not sure what a Xenia is, but the bug would be enough for me to make a swift exit! 🙂
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Wow, a Xenica sounds like a dangerous creature to be searching for. Great snippet!
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I think I’d be more concerned about the millipede-like bug. Great suspense working here. Can’t wait to see this bird!
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His anxiety and pride war wonderfully in this piece. Nice job, Kim!
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I have the impression that something large and dangerous is lurking in the lair!
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That’s what happens when you brag–a whole bunch of work to live up to it! I’m a little worried about this bird, now, though. It seems a little more dangerous than your average sparrow.
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I guess I wouldn’t be tough enough to be a real twitcher. No creepy-crawlies please! 🐛
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I love the sensual descriptions in this excerpt!
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What an enthralling picture this snippet sets of the scenery. And Xenicas don’t have to be afraid of large predators? Intriguing snippet. 🙂
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Great descriptive piece, Veronica. It’s definitely not a hobby that would appeal to me – lying in wait, in the rain, and with all sorts of bugs around – no, not for me. But fascinating all the same.
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Powerful excerpt and such awesome description. Plus I learned something new about bird watchers. I saw an HBO special on them watching in Central Park, NYC, but nothing was included about their bird watching “lingo.” Can you tell I love dialect. LOL.
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Thank you, Dani. I am so glad it hit the spot. I am fascinated by sociolects and all kinds of jargon. Each sport and hobby has one, you just need to find it 😉
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Nice way to show the danger of this activity. If dangerous animals steer clear, then I suspect I don’t want to meet a Xenica.
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Gah! Bugs! My fear! Great snippet though! 😀
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Nice subtle tension here, with the threat of danger yet the MC doesn’t seem too concerned. Yet we know her good fortune could turn on a dime!
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Yikes! If larger, more dangerous fauna are avoiding the place, why isn’t the MC. I’m worried now. LOVE it! 🙂
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Terrific description, and I love the story concept! Well done!
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I am more and more intrigued by the legendary Xenica. I hope it appears soon!
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As usual, excellent writing. I’m jealous of your verb usage.
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I love the description of the centipede. You’ve got me wondering why “larger, more dangerous fauna knew better than to dawdle in or around a Xenica’s range.” Is it such a fierce predator?
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