Greetings, Weekend Writing Warriors! I trust that you all had a magnificent Festive Season and are all suitably inspired for a productive and entertaining 2017?
Here is the next instalment of the third chapter of my short-but-growing-longer story about Daniel.
Daniel’s suicide attempt is thwarted by a two-second admin error by the Alien Specimen Collection Centre. The Alien Specimen Handlers decide to dispose of their ‘error’ by inserting Daniel into another world, and he finds himself being processed as an undocumented alien by the Galactic Government of Argle. During his induction, Daniel inadvertently qualifies himself for assignment to ASS. He is handed over to an earnest alien called Dravid. The story continues in Chapter Three: Waking Up In Someone Else’s Bed. The cheerful voice that greeted him upon waking continues…
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“Our monitors confirm that your conversion was successful and that your condition is satisfactory. The door on your left leads to an ablution facility and the cupboards on your right contain your wardrobe. Please avail yourself of both. Dravid will collect you when you are dressed.”
In the silence that ensued, Daniel’s brain flickered fitfully through his memory. Unable to remember anything after meeting Dravid, he replayed the last few seconds, in stunned incomprehension.
Wait! What conversion?! What had they done to him?!
He scrambled to the ablution cubicle and slid to a panicked halt in front of the merciless mirror.
Kim Magennis 2016
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Oh, wow, that is certainly a tense situation. Being converted and not remembering? Not good.
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Nooo! Wait, I want to know what happened and what he got converted to! Really an excellent excerpt…
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Great snippet!
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I’m really enjoying the schadenfreude of this story. I wonder what they’ve done to him now?
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Conversion does have an ominous ring to it. I’m almost dreading what he will see in the mirror! Great snippet.
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Gahh! I can’t believe you stopped there!!
Outstanding storytelling, Kim!
Happy new year to you, too. 🙂
I have no post up this week.
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It sounds like something is about to hit the means of air propulsion. Poor Daniel.
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Oh man! What’s he seeing in the mirror? What all did they “convert” about him? Nice snippet, and eager to find out what he sees!
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Oh wow, what a rude awakening!
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I’m really enjoying this, Kim. I hope you’ll pick up next week where you left off…
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What a fascinating story, and what a great hook at the end. Very keen to read more.
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Uh-oh! I can’t wait to hear what’s happened. “Conversion” doesn’t sound promising, and in my experience “satisfactory” is bureaucrat-speak for “bad, but could have been worse” 🙂
BTW – yes, I did get your email and I replied yesterday morning.I wonder if that’s got stuck somewhere?
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I found it, thanks. Just timing between continents 🙂
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What a great hook! Can’t wait to read more.
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Totally frightening, Kim. The name Dravid scares this reader let alone conversions and more. Your boy needs HELP!
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No. No. No. No. You don’t leave us there. What conversion?!?!?! Tweeted.
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Ooh! What a suspenseful ending!
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Hee! This is so cleverly-written. I can’t wait to learn more about this so-called ‘conversion’! Wonderful work, Kim! 🙂
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What a great scene, Kim! Active, tense and surprising. Way to set the hook!
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Yeah, I want to know what they did to him too! Poor guy.
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I can’t wait to read more! What have they done to him!?
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Really intrigued to know what he sees in the mirror. Great snippet!
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I was already wondering what had happened to him, and then you ended with that delicious line about the merciless mirror, heightening my curiosity.
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Thank you, Ed. That is good to know. ;-}
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Conversion? I think that is something one would want to remember. Or maybe not. I’m curious to know if his reflection will be the same as he remembers. Loving the snippets from this story! 🙂
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Thank you, Jessica. Next week will tell!
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