Greetings, Weekend Writing Warriors!
I have selected another short-short story to share from my collection. It is called: Hunter. It is 200 words. I hope you enjoy it. I had to bend a few punctuation rules to fit the sentences in. My apologies.
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She swooped, on dream-borrowed wings between the red and gold canyon walls. The up-thrust and cross-draft of the localised air currents brushed against her feather tips. As she allowed herself to surrender to the thrill of her flight, her talons tightened on their load.
“Goshawk, target is 30 seconds away, keep to current heading and current speed.”
“Copy, Austringer.”
Drawn back to the task at hand, she could see her target crouched on a raft, riding the churning water along the narrow canyon floor.
“I have a visual, Austringer.”
“Copy that, Goshawk, proceed with caution.”
“Copy, Austringer, I’m going in.”
©Kim Magennis 2016
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Oh wow! I want to know more. I want to be in there for the ???
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Very cool! 😀
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Thank you, Amy
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I like the suspense you’ve created. Great snippet!
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Thank you, Frank
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Nicely done. You’ve used your words wisely.
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Thank you, Elaine. Much appreciated
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Excellent spin on the original expectations. You always have a lovely twist, so I’m wondering what’s on the raft and what’s in her talons. Can’t wait for next week!
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Thank, Jenna. You are on to me!
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I love the perspective! Great way to put the reader right in the middle of flight.
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Thank you, Kimberly
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Great flying moment, and now I’m wondering what’s on the raft.
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Very good question, Christina!
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Sounds lovely, despite the sense of purpose driving that flight.
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Thank you, Caitlin
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Awesome! You fit so much into so few words.
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Thank you, Alexis!
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Your posts are always wonderful. Do you publish?
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Hi Cara, I am building a collection of short stories with publishing in mind. Possibly the end of this year.
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I am so impressed how you conveyed so much with so few words. Great visual. I’m curious what happens next. A twist? Great snippet.
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Always, Diane. I hope it surprises!
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Wouldn’t it be wonderful t fly like a bird? I love your writing, Kim.
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Thank you, Rachel. You have nade my day 💝 much appreciated
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Ooo, cool and beautifully written!
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My enduring dream, to fly!
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Fantastic – caught me into the story in so few words. Tweeted.
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Thank you, Daryl. This length certainly makes me weigh my words, carefully.
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This story is so different and haunting. Beautiful.
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Thank yo, Charmaine
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Whoa, that’s an awesome build-up scene for what’s about to transpire. And the description you use in your writing really transports you into the scene. Great work!
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Thank you, Jake. And thanks for stopping by!
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Soaring descriptions, and then what is she holding?
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Always so perceptive, Aurora. What, indeed?
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Your writing is always so mesmerizing, Kim. I’m drifting along, caught up in your scene, unsure of what the next sentence is going to spring on me!
Wonderful–as always!
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Thank you, Teresa. Much appreciated.
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I like this one, Kim. First it’s just a bird exulting in flight while grasping something that I assumed was a mouse. Then you turned my assumption end over end.
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Thank you, Ed. Your comment made my day!
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I love your descriptions, and the suspense you’ve built in so few words! Well done! I look forward to reading more. 🙂
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Thank you, Jessica!
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