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For the next few weeks we are sticking with Daniel Smith’s Story. It is still only tentatively titled “LabRat”, although it has reached a modest 10300 words or so.
BLURB: Inadvertantly ‘rescued’ (by a small admin error) seconds before committing suicide, Daniel is thrown into the Great Wide Multiverse and more adventure and misadventure than his otherwise mediocre life as a door to door vacuum cleaner salesman could prepare him for. He is assigned to the ASS ( Alien Sentience Services) and promptly given a ‘new look’ and put into ‘training’.
We last found Daniel on Bancoon, Argle’s third moon, and a scientific research centre. Daniel has spent his first day with ASS being melted.
The sensation was something beyond his most nightmarish imagining. Even so, Daniel could honestly say he had not felt pain, just terror.
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When he had first felt the molecules in his body liquefy he thought he would lose his mind.
By the third time, he had started to feel himself slipping from his solid self to a gloopy, sticky mass with a smidgen of detachment.
“Irrespective of what state your body attains, your basic senses will function normally. Each molecule of your matter contains every sense and intelligence: they are not extant in separate loci.” Halt had peered at him earnestly as he tried to explain.
During the morning testing the once earnest expression on Quorn’s face had changed from surprise, through disappointment, to a pained look of disbelief. He and Halt had poured over printouts and poked at computer screens with scrawny grey fingers. They had mumbled between themselves, voices rising in occasional dissent. Daniel could feel the heat of their reproachful stares, as he lay there.
©Kim Magennis 2017
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You do have a great imagination, Kim. Poor Daniel. He becomes gloop and they’re not happy? What did they expect? Can’t wait to read more.
I forgot to sign up, but I still posted my snippet. http://dianeburton.blogspot.com/
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Thanks Diane
Visited and tweeted ❤
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Very engaging and descriptive, as usual. 😉
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He’s not a very cooperative lab rat, I see! But it’s probably not his fault–there’s likely an issue with their calculations!
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I loved your last sentence.
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Thank you Elaine. Don’t you find that ome people can make you feel like you broke something (like a universal law) if you don’t fit their expectations?
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I love how the alien scientist looks at him reproachfully, as though he’s deliberately causing their problems.
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Thank you, Ed. It (later) turns out that they didn’t quite get their coding right.
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Uh oh. This can’t be good for Daniel.
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Just when you think it couldn’t get any worse, it totally does!
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😉 of course!
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A terrible time to be a guinea pig. At least they haven’t said “Uh Oh!” – at least not yet!
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I don’t think Daniel would be as calm if he realised just how much of a guinea pig he is at the moment.
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Oh Dear Heavens. Poor Daniel. Kim, this story is very distressing to me. Make it work where he’s healthy and normal.
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Dear Charmaine! Daniel is tougher than he realises. He never comes to real harm, he cannot. Everything just challenges how he sees the world.
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If that’s how you treat characters you like, I’d hate to think what you will do to the ones you don’t like! LOL Very imaginative and original excerpt -and a terrifying ordeal for poor Daniel. Great piece of writing!
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Oh, man. Not only are they melting him, but then they screw it up? What a diabolical mind you have, Kim. (That’s a compliment, btw).
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Thank you, Alexis (blushing). I readily acknowledge my evil imagination 😉 and it is a high compliment, indeed.
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What are they trying to do and why is his body not responding as they expect???
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Excellent questions, as always, Aurora. Thank you
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He needs to be on that TV show – The World’s Worst Jobs. No one, I repeat, No one wants be come ‘gloop’.
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Absolutely, Sue! Thank you
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Daniel certainly has his challenges in this new world, to say the least! I’m in awe of your imagination and can’t wait to read whatever comes next for our hapless hero. Great snippet!
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Thank you, Veronica. That is an awesome compliment. I am rather fond of Daniel, so he is going to have a tough time 😇
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Great snippet. thanks for sharing.
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Thank you, Kimberly
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Poor Daniel. This has always been fascinating – wonderfully descriptive and imaginative. Tweeted.
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Thank you, Daryl
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That would be quite a disturbing feeling, I think.
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I imagine so. Sadly, for Daniel, it gets worse 💛
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This poor guy!
But you really know now to write an intriguing story. Great ideas.
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Thank you, Cara. Much appreciated
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Oh, that would be such a weird, maybe even horrible feeling. But, I think it might prove useful in the future? Maybe he could learn to control it somehow? I’m curious to find out where you take this story next. 🙂
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Thank you, Jessica. Indeed, that is the Question!
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