Hello it is time, again, for Weekend Writing Warriors! This is my next 10-sentence-snippet in my latest short story. This piece has been edited to fit the 8-10 sentence requirement
#8sunday September 27 , 2015 Birdie 08
This story is told from the point of view of a ‘haunt’. She is trapped in a limbo of homeless wandering, when she meets an orange cat and its human child. After an encounter with the child’s abusive father the trio escape into the nearby wilds.
To read the preceding text click here. The story continues with the following 10 sentences:
“Miss? Sorry Miss! It’s getting dark, Miss. We need to find shelter. I know a place, if you can walk?”
I groaned, and staggered to my feet, with her bony shoulders under my hands. She was thin and fragile, but yet substantial enough to lead me to another, even more run-down shack in the darkening woods.
I woke again, to the flickering shadows of a candle creating a mad chiaroscuro on the shack walls. The first recognizable thing I saw was the orange cat, with its yellow eyes. As soon as I met its gaze, it trotted up to me and butted my forehead with its striped head.
© Kim Magennis 2015
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This just makes me smile. Good for all of them….and I love the firelight on the walls, too. More, please?
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Love the comforting head-butt from the kitty. I think the haunt and the young girl need each other and that is why they have the connection.
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Well, that’s at least two friendly faces, even if one is a cat. Maybe things are looking up?
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Love the cat’s reaction and I’m with the others in thinking your heroine seems to be getting more ‘real’ as we go along. Great snippet!
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This is sweet and sad at the same time. Makes me want to read more!
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Thank you Millie
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She is certainly real to the cat.
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Love the interaction with her and the cat.
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Thank you Frank
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Kitty knows she is being helpful!
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Absolutely, Dani!
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Fascinating, mysterious and WHAM funny with a head butt from the CAT! Love it.
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Cats are kinda like that!
They make sure you keep it real.
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Aw, the kitty head-butt! I love how this is unfolding. Very interesting.
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Thank you Christina, much appreciated.
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I’m with everyone else: I love the cat. I feel like he (she?) will be a wise presence for the “haunt.”
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Statistically the cat should be male, but I have been lucky enough to know some female marmalades. (The haunt is not a ‘cat-person’, so she wouldn’t know that.)
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I’m really getting into this story.
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Fantastic description and mood painting in these scene, Kim. Beautiful prose and atmosphere, I love it!
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Thank you for the awesome compliment Steven.
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She seems to be coming more corporeal, Kim, and yes, I like the scenes with the cat. Animals are such amazing gifts for us. I prefer dragons, but cats work too.
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there is a quote i love: always be yourself: unless you can be a dragon, then always be a dragon!
I love cats (bigger the better) but I definitely am a dragon fan!
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Still love the cat. Interesting snippet!
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Thanks Ed. (Effing may get jealous!)
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