Greetings, Weekend Writing Warriors!
Thank you for your encouragement. Due to popular consensus here is the first installment of the third chapter of my short-but-growing-longer story about Daniel.
Daniel’s suicide attempt is thwarted by a two second admin error by the Alien Specimen Collection Centre. The Alien Specimen Handlers decide to dispose of their ‘error’ by inserting Daniel into another world, and he finds himself being processed as an undocumented alien by the Galactic Government of Argle. During his induction, Daniel inadvertently qualifies himself for assignment to ASS. He is handed over to an earnest alien called Dravid. The story continues in Chapter Three: Waking Up In Someone Else’s Bed.
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It took Daniel a full two minutes to realise that he hadn’t woken up in his own bedroom.
For one thing, it was bright; something his basement bedsit had never been guilty of.
For another, he was comfortably cocooned in crisp, detergent-perfumed sheets, with no hint of lurking mould and without recalcitrant bedsprings digging into the tender bits of his angular body.
Keeping his eyes shut, he gave himself over to the luxuriously unaccustomed feeling of having slept particularly well.
“Good morning, Daniel Smith.” He froze. “Please do not be alarmed, you are safe and well,” the pleasant, cheerful voice continued.
Daniel’s eyes shot open, to an immaculate, empty bedroom.
Kim Magennis 2016
Well, that is the end of this chapter. Would you like more of the story? or something else? Let me know, below…
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Yeah… I would be instantly panicking if some unknown voice said that to me. Super creepy, and amazing writing!
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Thank you, Amy
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Sounds like his life might have been a bit rough, if he’s appreciating a decent bed. Can’t wait to find out what’s in store for him!
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Thank you, Christina
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I can see why he might be a little freaked out here.
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It gets worse 😁
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More, more, more, please!
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Your wish, is my command 😁
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Great hook! Who is speaking in that empty luxury suite?
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We meet Ed, a lot later in the story.
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What an intriguing story. I love it. More please.
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Thank you, Rachel
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Disembodied voice first thing in the morning. Yeah, I’d be panicking.
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Talk about the ‘morning after’😝
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Favorite part – recalcitrant bedsprings
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Thank you Sue
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Yes,I can feel them!
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That voice is creepy and not at all reassuring! The fact that the room is empty means someone or something is monitoring him. I immediately wondered about something like a house AI.
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Got it in one, Ian.
A rather specific intelligence…
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Seems as if his situation has improved but…I have a feeling you the author will impose a lot of fun twists and turns! Really enjoying this story…great snippet.
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Thank you, Veronica. Sadly, you are right about me 😝
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Well now, if the room’s empty, who’s talking to him? Great depiction of his new location. Will he live there, or is it temporary? 🙂
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These are his new digs for a bit ☺
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It’s impressive how alarming “don’t be alarmed is.” Love all the details about his… hovel of a room.
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Yes, Daniel’s previous accommodation was not exactly sparkling.
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Can’t I just stay in bed a few minutes longer? I know the feeling. But, an alarm has sounded. Where is he now and what is in store for the unfortunate Daniel?
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Indeed, Aurora. Thank you for stopping by
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loving this. He’s all comfy then a voice speaks but no ones there – can’t wait for what’s next.
Tweeted.
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Thank you, Victoria.
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I like your use of description.
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Thank you!
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This is just a wonderful excerpt – there’s nothing bad I can say about it. So yes, I’m also voting for more!
Wishing you a very happy Christmas & New Year.
Marcia
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Thank you, Marcia. And Merry Christmas to you, too!
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Carry on, you rascal and may all your Christmases be bright
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And yours too, Charmaine🎄
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I continue to be intrigued by this story. I wouldn’t mind waking up in such a nice, cozy bed with freshly-washed sheets. But nobody wants to be subjected to a cheerful voice in the morning. lol
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Yes, indeed. Especially when things turn out like they do, this time 😉
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“Please, Kim, may I have some more?”
“Holds laptop out plaintively, because there aren’t any more sentences in it.*
When this getting-longer story is all done, please tell me where I can buy it! =D
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Ah, Shan! Thank you!
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Now I need to get over to you and see the MORE, even though I couldn’t quite get my post finished in time this week!
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Love this story. It’s a definite page-turner.
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Thank you, Cara
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I don’t think I’d feel all that calmed by the voice myself. Great snippet. Can’t wait to read more
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Thank you, Fallon
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Anytime you hear, “Please do not be alarmed, you are safe” — panic!
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Exactly right, Ed.
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I love the description you use in this snippet! It pulled me right into the story. And what a cliffhanger ending! I love it and need more! 🙂
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Thank you, Jessica. Much appreciated.
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That’s like saying “No need to panic…” I’m so enjoying this read! Happy holidays, Kim.
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Thank you, Nancy. And Happy Holidays to you!
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